There is no doubt that it is extremely different between living at home and in the dormitory. They both have individual advantages as well as disadvantages. Nevertheless, people cannot choose the form of living most of the time.
Those who live at home don’t need to rent dormitories. They don’t have to move their furniture from their houses to their dormitories, and they could depend upon their parents rather than do all the things themselves. In addition, if they bring their own lunch boxes from home, they are capable of saving money as well as time instead of waiting in line to buy from outside. Notwithstanding, people living at home won’t learn how to make themselves more independent voluntarily most often. Most of them are still like children.
On the contrary, people who live in dormitories ought to train themselves to deal with problems and challenges as they face. They should wash and dry their clothes in the sun. Besides, they need to clean their dorms as well as stuff on their own. Moreover, as their computers crash as well as electric equipment doesn’t work, they have to fix them by themselves or find somebody to help. That can make them grow up. However, renting a dormitory and buying for three meals cost a host of money. In fact, it becomes more and more expensive nowadays.
Now that we cannot decide where to live, why not accept and adapt ourselves to the state of play? No matter where we live, we cannot forget our main goal - learning more knowledge so as to enhance our own abilities. Cherish the state of play and concentrate on how to achieve our aim. That will help us get ahead in life.
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1.Write out the topic sentence.
There is no doubt that it is extremely different between living at home and in the dormitory. There is no doubt that it is extremely different between living
2.Circle the controlling idea.
individual advantages as well as disadvantages
3.Is the topic sentence persuasive? Does it tell the writer’s attitude?
Yes, it is persuasive and tell us the writer’s attitude clearly.
4.List the points of comparison.
Those who live at home don’t need to rent dormitories.(home)
Make themselves more independent voluntarily. (dorm)
5.Are the points of comparison significant and interest?
Yes, these two points tell us the advantage and disadvantage between home and dormitory. So, that is significant.
6.Is there enough support for the points?
On basic, I think there more idea and opinion for this analysis. Or you can introduce the true example to support your paragraph.
7.Is the paragraph organized by points?
Yes, it is.
8.What part of the paragraph did you enjoy most?
I have interested in the second paragraph that it talks about the advantage of living in home.
9.What part would you like to know more about?
The final paragraph which it can describe more opinion about your thinking I would like to know.
10.Others
I find out you use the beautiful word in your article, I can learn many words in your content.
1. There is no doubt that it is extremely different between living at home and in the dormitory. They both have individual advantages as well as disadvantages.
2. They both have individual advantages as well as disadvantages.
3. No, the topic sentence doesn’t show the author’s attitude.
4. The expenses, house-moving, independence.
5. Yes, they tell us what is significant to the author.
6. Yes, if we aim to become mature, it shows living in the dorm can definitely help us.
7. Well, this article seems organized by two aspects -- living at home and in the dorm.
8. The third paragraph, which shows the author’s concern about living out off home.
9. Would you like to live in the dorm or at home?
10. From your article, I could learn a host of thesaurus. It’s nice to read your article.
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