I major in business administration. The reasons why I chose my major are multiphase. In reality, I don’t think that I chose my major because I was interested in business administration. On account of external occasion rather than my interest, I made up my mind to select business administration as my major at that time. I will explain my motives in detail as follows.
First, I obeyed my parents’ suggestion and desire so as not to make them disappointed. This is the chief cause that I chose my major. Both my parents expected me to study in business administration; hence, I followed their anticipation instead of persisting in my opinion. Second, I considered what my job will be in the future. According to many people’s suggestion, those whose major is business administration might have even more opportunities of work. For example, they could work in banks, enterprises or government organs. In addition, they may be professors in business administration department in college. There are a large number of choices in spite that there are a great number of competitors. Although I have no confidence in myself to compete with those whose major are the same as me, I will try my best to strengthen my competitive ability.
As a matter of fact, I believe that my parents’ decisions as well as advice are good for me. They own much more job experiences than I own. They realize the situation of workplace deeply; on the contrary, I know little about the workplace of society. I think that they make any determination for my sake. They hope that I could face less difficulty in the future. Due to all the reasons, I chose my major eventually.
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Support:
A. Parents' expectations.
B. Consults someone who is maturer.
B.1. Possible jobs in the future.
C. Parents' opinions
C.1. They are much more experienced.
C.2. Believe in parents' motives and decisions.
The last part of the second paragraph does not relate to the topic sentence. And last paragraph seems relate to the first support.
These supports seem enough to explain how you considered others' advices, but they seem weak to describe your own thought and stand.
I'd love to know more about your opinion of future jobs. What's your opinion of working in banks, and what the positions in a company would you like to be? and why?
1. Write out the generalization(topic sentence) and circle the controlling idea.
I major in business administration.
2. List the support the writer gives.
A I obeyed my parents’ suggestion and desire so as not to make them disappointed.
B I considered what my job will be in the future.
3. Does the writer have a clear, focused topic sentence and controlling idea?
yes
4. Does the writer give enough support?
Yes, but more ideas would be good.
5. Does all of the support relate to the topic sentence?
Yes, the contents have relationship to the topic. Moreover, you can dip another opinion without your parents’ decisions.
6. What kind of organization does the writer use?
She use the method that we called it progressing thinking.
7. What part of the paragraph did you enjoy the most?
The last paragraph talked about the competition of her major in the future.
8. What part would you like to know more about?
The real thinking about your parents decision in your own future.
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